切换到宽版
  • 2149阅读
  • 20回复

[英语]求助,帮个忙啊 [复制链接]

上一主题 下一主题
 
发帖
3031
啄木币
2690
鲜花
242
只看楼主 正序阅读 使用道具 0楼 发表于: 2007-05-09
那位高人帮忙修改一下阿?
Harmony in Our School
Only in a harmonious environment can we do well in our study and enjoy our life in the college. I felicitate it that I chose Shandong University. Because I feel happy and relaxed here .We enjoy ourselves, enjoy the life, and enjoy all the harmonious things here.
Firstly, I think the beautiful schoolyard is the basis to build up a harmonious campus. There stand lots of big trees and colorful flowers in our school. And we can always hear birds warbling around us. When I walk through the green and red, I feel as if I was playing in a rainbow world. And sometime I forget the time. Every time I waked from the beauty, I said:” How wonderful! I like the feelings!”
You know, when you feel well, everything will be OK!
Secondly, students also play an important role in the harmonious environment. Students studying here were ones who once did well in every aspect in their high school. So, these students with good manners are the battleship to keep the campus harmonious. We know that a praised family is held by an able housewife, in the same way, a harmonious campus is kept by students with high quality.
Besides, we consider friendship more important in the college than in high school. When all is said and done, we have to live and study together for 5 years, and we really value our friendship. When talking about it, we always feel that it is not an easy thing for us to get together here. “We are blood brothers!” we always say.
So, there is also a harmonious environment in our class or dormitory. And the harmonious campus is just made up of these relatively small harmonious environments.
In my opinion, only with everyone’s endeavor, can we build a harmonious campus. Perhaps you needn’t do some influential things, but you certainly play an undeniable role.
I want to restate it that I feel lucky studying here and I love the harmonious campus.
评价一下你浏览此帖子的感受

精彩

感动

搞笑

开心

愤怒

无聊

灌水
离线玻璃夕阳
发帖
262
啄木币
650
鲜花
11
只看该作者 20楼 发表于: 2007-05-25
引用第10楼五木2007-05-19 10:40发表的:we always say应该用saying吧,当句中有代表明显的感情色彩时,always后的动词用ing形式好象是初中老师讲的,不知对否?


好象不对。。。个人意见。。。
发帖
3031
啄木币
2690
鲜花
242
只看该作者 19楼 发表于: 2007-05-23
引用第17楼xmj2232007-05-23 12:36发表的:when you feel well, everything will be OKwell means you are in good conditon(related to health)overall,your article is good,only with a little chinglish ,hope you will do better in the future


thank you for your advice, and i will try to improve my english in variety of ways.
it seems that you do very well in english , can i make friends with you
my qq 490010417
发帖
3031
啄木币
2690
鲜花
242
只看该作者 18楼 发表于: 2007-05-23
引用第16楼xmj2232007-05-23 12:33发表的:And sometime I forget the time. Every time I waked from the beautysometimes i even forget the time, maybe betteranother question , what's the meaning of beauty? don't you think you may arise misunderstanding?




说的有道理
向高人学习
离线xmj223
发帖
212
啄木币
207
鲜花
27
只看该作者 17楼 发表于: 2007-05-23
when you feel well, everything will be OK
well means you are in good conditon(related to health)
overall,your article is good,only with a little chinglish ,hope you will do better in the future
离线xmj223
发帖
212
啄木币
207
鲜花
27
只看该作者 16楼 发表于: 2007-05-23
And sometime I forget the time. Every time I waked from the beauty
sometimes i even forget the time, maybe better
another question , what's the meaning of beauty? don't you think you may arise misunderstanding?
发帖
3031
啄木币
2690
鲜花
242
只看该作者 15楼 发表于: 2007-05-20
引用第14楼五木2007-05-20 13:10发表的:如果是倒装,那前面的逗号怎么解释?还是觉得有点怪


有逗号吗?
发帖
956
啄木币
862
鲜花
251
只看该作者 14楼 发表于: 2007-05-20
如果是倒装,那前面的逗号怎么解释?
还是觉得有点怪
发帖
3031
啄木币
2690
鲜花
242
只看该作者 13楼 发表于: 2007-05-19
引用第11楼五木2007-05-19 10:42发表的:can we build a harmonious campus是不是we can更好些呢个人意见


倒装好像就应该用can we 吧?
感谢你提了这么多评论
谢谢哦
发帖
956
啄木币
862
鲜花
251
只看该作者 12楼 发表于: 2007-05-19
I feel lucky studying here
感觉很奇怪
发帖
956
啄木币
862
鲜花
251
只看该作者 11楼 发表于: 2007-05-19
can we build a harmonious campus是不是we can更好些呢
个人意见
发帖
956
啄木币
862
鲜花
251
只看该作者 10楼 发表于: 2007-05-19
we always say
应该用saying吧,当句中有代表明显的感情色彩时,always后的动词用ing形式
好象是初中老师讲的,不知对否?
发帖
956
啄木币
862
鲜花
251
只看该作者 9楼 发表于: 2007-05-19
And sometime I forget the time. Every time I waked from the beauty, I said:” How wonderful! I like the feelings!”这句时态好象也不对
发帖
956
啄木币
862
鲜花
251
只看该作者 8楼 发表于: 2007-05-19
When I walk through the green and red, I feel as if I was playing in a rainbow world
时态不对呀
发帖
956
啄木币
862
鲜花
251
只看该作者 7楼 发表于: 2007-05-19
第三行的 stand应该用 stands吧
个人意见
快速回复
限100 字节
 
上一个 下一个